Chapter 13 of the Aphanes, "Transference"

[tocryabout]

Lucky Chapter 13 is up. I can't really talk this one up, because it's not a happy-fun chapter, but I'll give it a shot. Father issues! Atypical antipsychotics! Inuit art! And if you thought Joel was annoying before, he's pushing it now.

Link to the contents page, for those just joining us.

Comments

[talktooloose.livejournal.com]

Way to torture me! Your link's not working!

[waterstrider.livejournal.com]

Zuh? It works for me. I'll try again:

Come on now, be a good girl (http://qlink.queensu.ca/~0fac/tocryabout/aphanes/index.html)

Father issues and whining

[youngest-one.livejournal.com]

I can see why this isn't a happy - fun chapter.

It is, however, some of the best writing I have seen on the web. Joel's emotional state is described with fascinating and illuminating metaphors; rightness and wholeness settles into his gut, tenderness unfolds, Joel's mind has a rotten core from which his depression issues like insects. The rich emotional landscape you've created for your original character is dark, brutal and gut wrenching, but well worth reading.

And a Jubilee cameo! It's always interesting to see how Jubilee is used by fanfic writers. Here, she served the purpose of the chapter perfectly. She had no malice in her intentions, and no great sadness for Joel, she just knew what it was like to loose a parent and wanted to sympathize.

The quotes at the beginning and end? Are perfect.

[brownbetty]

I don't know, I somehow found I had more sympathy for Joel than previously, perhaps because of his self-awareness or maybe just because of the familiarity of the feeling, my brain tells me to say it, so I do. The internal struggle is very... hmm. Familiar, perhaps. Knowing that one is being manipulative, and not liking it, but doing it anyway.

[ex-the-epic80.livejournal.com]

Hum...mind if I take up a spot?